Sean Pendr

As I am not finished writing my re-debut yet i will keep this short. you use the phrase "he asked" too prolifically. try to find an alternative. i would suggest ...

here is an example of dialogue from my book, it is in my opinion the best example of dialogue i have ever written. regardless of the fact none of you ...

i have just read chapter one and have descovered an uncanny lack of detail. unfortunatly you havce a knack for K~ names, a problem i hope you will meet do ...

Do i smell a werewolf obsession there? nice imagry in your prolague, just make it longer ok? and less obvious forshadowing. make it like. "Then as if for a moment ...

WOW! Getting a lot of attention are we? lol I just so happen to LOVE IT!!! so true is this all! anyway just stopping by to say PAWS OFF of ...

I am effectivly surprised. SURPRISE! it seems that like myself you have a knack for detail in such a form that is relaxing and not as such of what is ...

I apologize for the wait but my computer has died and i have lost everything except what is posted here. more reviews on this would be nice if possible and ...

dammit!!! stop writing so much! ^.^ i can keep up....... lol im gonna try to review the others i just printed them out for a sit down. *drinks coffee* anway ...

thank you thank you ^.^ i really aprieciate that the title blooded is found in alot of my posts but i have forsaken all exept this one so in truth ...

i agree wiht kylan you need more meat on them bones....lol.... but the power of your descriptions flow well, i hope you write more and longer on this topic because ...

very well written but you kind of jump a little too far into the plot too sudenly. find a more flowing trasitions or star4t it from the get go. like ...

lol thanks no they are not from a village and no he wasnt out of breath. you dont see marduks thoughts just his outward expressions and emotions for reasons later ...

this is te teaser or my book i hope you ask for more for those who wish to see it in formatted mode with its beutiful working cover it is ...

god...your a peom powerhouse.... the forced ryming is evident in the 2nd and 4th lines of each stanza, it flows nice, and you word use fluctuates throughout. imagry comes from ...

..........................AMAZING!!!!!!.............This peom reminds me of much of the stuff i have written, it is to me immaculate, it has depth, easily recognised apllication, reader inferences, st